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[POTC holiday fic] - KINGDOMS OF THE SWAN companion vignette - "Frankicense for the King" - 2/3 - R
A/N: Ok ya’ll, here’s part two as promised, with three well in the works. Once again, this baby is a bit rough around the edges, but hey, at least it’s here, right? This story is a vignette that can stand alone if need be, but I’ve envisioned it as a story existing a little ways into the future of my “Kingdoms of the Swan” (KotS) universe – so, sadly but truthfully, it’ll probably make even better sense once I’ve written another, oh, 15,000 words or so. That being said, it will be helpful for you to know a couple of things about said universe.
 
Thing the first: Jack has a younger sister named Saraswati who goes by the name of ‘Sara’ and runs a spice bazaar at Shipwreck Cove. They were both born in Cochin, India. If you feel like you recognize Sara’s character, you probably do, as another version of her figured prominently in my unfinished story “Sailing in Samsara.” However, the Sara of that fic is far different from the Sara detailed here, her divergent personality the product of the whims of another AU universe.
 
Thing the second: Sara has a 10 year old son named “Rajeev.”
 
Thing the third: Jack and Lizzie have been living together platonically for some months. The rest will become clear as KotS unfolds.
 
In terms of this story, I wanted to take the symbolism of the Magi’s gifts and turn them a bit on their heads. Therefore: gold symbolizes virtue, frankincense symbolizes prayer, and myrrh symbolizes suffering.
 
Series tie-in: A standalone vignette set in the Kingdoms of the Swan universe.
Installment: 2/3
Segment Title: “Frankincense for the King”
Timeframe: Post AWE
Pairing: J/E, shades of W/E
Rating: R - for language and some sizzle
Word Count: 4,780
Disclaimer: No copyright infringement is intended. All rights belong to Disney, etc.
Summary: It’s the gift that keeps on giving: this chapter touches on “Frankincense” – a symbol of prayer. Jack makes a transformation, Lizzie makes a journey, and Christmas dinner swings into gear.
Acknowledgements: Many, many thanks to [info]djarum99   for her skillful beta and for all of her encouragement and support! All remaining mistakes are mine – the product of lazy fingers and eyes.

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Holiday Vignette: “Gold for the King”, 1/3 

Frankincense for the King
 
Elizabeth awoke to an empty bed and a pain she could only liken to the babe within her attempting to chisel its way out of her belly with a blunted fork. She gritted her teeth, the splayed fingers of her right hand dipping into the cool imprint left by Jack’s body.
 
Well, he’s gone to the city, then. And why shouldn’t he? You’re as big as a horse, Lizzie-girl, and ten times as ornery.
 
It’s not that she blamed him for leaving; or rather, she can no more condemn him for fleeing than she can condemn herself for far greater betrayals.
 
The chill of iron beneath her fingertips loomed closer each day, it seemed.
 
Jack.
 
Her fingers curled into the wrinkles his hips had created, the sensation of the cool, cotton ridges rolling between her fingers and sending a tingle zipping up her forearm and into her shoulder-socket. She grasped at the sheets, yawning and imagining him beside her.
 
Because she couldn’t roll to her stomach and bury herself in his scent, she drew the sheets from the mattress and bundled herself in what remained of him: the ghosts of his slumber contained in those yellowing, threadbare scraps of fabric. Inhaling a mouthful of sheet and air, her lips opened against the blankets in an attempt to conjure something of the taste of him.
 
You need a bath, Jack Sparrow.
 
There would had been a time – not so long ago, really – when Jack’s particular tang would have smothered her, and she’d have been calling for Estrella with the bathwater before he’d set a toe into her bed. Now, though – in these strange, lonely days beyond the edges of the map - she welcomed him just as he was, loathe to allow him to wash a finger for fear that some small part of him would wash away with each sud.
 
She remained swaddled for what felt like hours. The blankets warmed slowly, her breath collecting in the corners of her cocoon until the molten haze of her body-heat scorched her cheeks, rendering breathing difficult.
 
“I see you’ve steamed yourself again, Dumpling, Jack’s sly voice whispered behind her eyes.
 
And it was then that she heard it – that clink-clink of glass on metal, the ping and clank of cutlery rattling into the room.
 
“Elizabeth?”
 
She poked her head out of her chrysalis, an eyebrow rising. “Did you just call me ‘Dumpling’, Jack?”
 
A wry, Cheshire smile uncurled across his face, and he set down a loaded tray on the bedside table with a wink. He did not answer, but instead leaned back, arms spread wide.
 
Elizabeth felt her eyebrows rocket skyward at the sight of breakfast. In farthest corner of her mind, beyond the rumbling of her belly and the fog of sleep, a niggling little voice piped up, warning her that something was amiss with Jack – something tilted-like and standing on its head.
 
She ignored that voice, eyeing the food.
 
“’Dumpling’ – now that’s a name with some descriptive merit. ‘Dumpling’”, he repeated, as though tasting the word. “Nice round sound to it – rolls about quite pleasantly – and metaphorically, hmmm? ‘Dumpling.’ Yes, I think that’ll do just smashingly.”
 
Elizabeth sat upright after a series of false starts, rocking and shifting not entirely unlike a turtle turned on its back – much to Jack’s amusement. She reached behind her to scrunch several pillows into the groove of her back, ignoring Jack in lieu of surveying the tray beside her.
 
Somehow, he must have dredged silver from the cellar – and she assumed it had to have been the cellar that had housed the elegant little teapot and service, as she’d never seen it before. The cutlery and tray sparkled as though recently polished; only the legs at the base of the pot seemed purpled ‘round their bends. A lime and a mango had been sliced and fanned in smiling arches on a chipped china plate, and lumps of a stew-like substance - along with something resembling rice - exhaled heavy, panting breaths of steam from a rounded metal container. Elizabeth made a mental note to ask where Jack had found the materials for the spread, but the delicate, unmistakable scent of English tea wafting from the serpentine spout of the teapot disrupted her musings.
 
She grasped the swan-neck handle of the only bit of finery she did recognize: the blue china cup she’d pilfered from Jack’s then-deserted cabin several months prior. The memory roused something folded and dusty inside her. She smiled, remembering sneaking into his bedroom to rifle through his cabinets. A blush of something edging between guilt and pride pinked her cheeks.
 
“And what’s all this for?”
 
“An offering for my fearsome, arresting wife and monarch, of course.”
 
“Oh, yes. Of course.” She recalled their evening in flashes, her pulse quickening at the memory of her hand resting on his chest, his racing heart nearly beating through her palm.
 
Games, Elizabeth. Games and gifts and nothing more.
 
“And what has my dutiful, gracious husband brought me this morning.”
 
Two can play, Jack, and I shall enjoy it.
 
“Ah, yes. Tea, of course – very sovereignly sort of libation, if by no small measure because of the labor required to pluck it. I did manage to salvage several survivors from the garden – and you really should think of finding someone to trim that jungle, Bess – and then, courtesy of me sister, basmati rice and sambol - and some sort of curry. Mutton, I think.”
 
“I’m afraid I’m unfamiliar with –“
 
“I’ll explain later, alright? Can’t bake bread in that bloody kitchen, and you know it.”
 
“Oh,” she sighed, no longer listening. The subtle scent of tea luring her towards the pot.
 
Elizabeth poured the brew with a careless slosh, anxious to inhale the velvet steam, to luxuriate in the familiar brownflower taste.  She took a sip, the roof of her mouth delightfully singed.

Jack cleared his throat.
 
Noisily.
 
Deliberately.
 
Exasperated, she looked up, ready to deliver whatever cutting jibe she could muster at whatever bloody time of morning it was.
 
Elizabeth choked, tea scorching her esophagus.
 
Jack squinted, scrunching his nose before resuming his former stance.
 
He looked… wrong. Arms akimbo, he stood, one leg propped on the bed frame, his chin regally raised.
 
It was his chin that was the problem. He’d trimmed his trademark beard and moustache, and where his braids used to dangle, only a scrap of hair remained. The same slight rasp of a goatee and moustache, in truth, that Will had sported during their last stand against the EITC. In place of his usual faded coat and threadbare tunic, he wore a navy blue shirt and a brown vest that matched new, fitted breeches. His sash and tricorn and all the myriad baubles that dangled from his waist were nowhere to been seen. Only his boots remained, and Elizabeth suppressed a giggle at the thought of the infamous Captain Jack Sparrow decked in full stockings and buckle-front shoes.
 
A plain, blue square of fabric had replaced his bandana, and even his mass of braids and dreadlocks were gathered into something resembling a tidy cue. The only remnants of her Jack that remained – apart from his boots – were the rings on his fingers and a very thin, dim line of kohl about the eyes – as though that particular facet of his persona refused to be scrubbed free.
 
And Jack was clean – cleaner than she’d ever seen him. Pressed and buttoned and scoured.
 
He even smelled distinctly different – his usual musk of sweat, patchouli, and sandalwood replaced by something that smelled strikingly similar to the Aqua Admirabilis her father had worn – hints of neroli oil and bergamot, lavender and rosemary grazing her nose. Where he’d found a dressing kit, she’d no idea, though the thought of Jack rifling through the cellar for a nécessaire chest prompted Elizabeth to stifle a giggle, hiccupping instead.
 
Clearing his throat again, Jack fixed his eyes on Elizabeth, boring into her pointedly.
 
Well, what do you think, Lizzie-girl? – ah sorry, I mean ‘Bess’ – or rather, Dumpling? Fancy giving the goods the once-over?”
 
A waggle of his brows and a crooked leer, his hips rocking forward ever so slightly.
 
Elizabeth’s cheeks burned.
 
“I – well, umm,” she fumbled, struck dumb. “Uh – well, first of all, I’m not sure I like you referring to me as ‘Dumpling,’ actually.”
 
Jack exhaled heavily, waving away her words with an exasperated flick of the wrist. Plopping to the end of the bed, his hand closed around her calf and he gave her a little shake, his eyes rolling.
 
“The clothes, Elizabeth. What do you think of the bloody clothes? Do I look enough like your eunuch to suit?”
 
Despite the ridiculousness of their situation, his stare – intent and almost predatory – ignited something bumbling yet hopeful within her. Her skin burned beneath his touch, even through the layers of blanket.
 
A shudder of breath, her fingers worrying at the sheets she clutched.
 
She blinked, stilling herself. In point of fact, she wasn’t entirely sure what she felt, actually. He was surprisingly dashing, this groomed, subdued Jack. He remained thrilling even in such ordinary attire.
 
Still, she found herself longing rather wistfully for his pungent, scruffy, vagabond, incorrigibly delicious Jack-ness.
 
“You - you did this all for me?” she managed after another breath.
 
He sprung to his feet, huffing and pacing to the window. “Bloody hell, woman. Has the babe sucked the wits from you? Of course I bloody did it for you. What do you think, hmmm? That I chopped off me ticklers for the sheer joy of it?” He motioned as if to grasp his missing braids.
 
“Ticklers, Jack?”
 
“Never mind. That’s beside the point.”
 
“You didn’t have to do this, Jack.”
 
“Oh, for the love of God, Lizzie! Does it please you, or not?”
 
“Oh, Jack.”
 
Well?”
 
She studied the dour profile of his frown as he stared out the window. It took some effort to maneuver herself from the bed, but she managed, only spilling a few drops of tea in the process.
 
Ambling to his perch, she stopped at his shoulder, her hand lighting on his bicep.
 
“You look ravishing, Jack Sparrow.”
 
“I do, don’t I.” And he turned to her then, all gold and twinkle as his palm found its place at the crook of her hip, guiding her across the room to rest in her rocking chair.
 
Jack instructed her on the finer points of East Indian breakfasts: the rolling of gravy and rice into tidy balls; the adjustment of the dishes’ spice and tartness through the introduction of sambol, lime. Elizabeth made a mess of it – gravy drooling down her wrists, rice peppering her hair – and Jack laughed, saving her from a certain, sticky doom by patting together the little globes balls for her. She marveled at his quickness, at the deftness of his fingers as he worked. Using only the tip of his index finger, middle finger, and thumb, he managed to make quick work of her plate.
 
When Elizabeth asked where he’d learned this strange, contortionist’s talent, he merely shrugged, mumbling something about the fact that not all boys and girls were raised in England.
 
And so they ate -  in measured swallows, the creak of the rocker against the floorboards a fitting accompaniment for several of Jack’s rather obtusely narrated tales of intrigue on the high seas.
 
His fingers slippery with mango juice, he’d sprawled on the bed as she rocked, telling her of his adventures in shaving (“Broke that tawdry little washbasin of yours, darlin’.”), his ordeals in the cellar (“Rats so big, Lizzie, I nearly twisted me bloody ankles tripping over the buggers.”), his butchering of the duck (“Who’d have thought those bloody little buggers could be so damned slippery?”), and all the sordid details of his sojourn into the brothels at Shipwreck to scavenge a “sprinkling of something pleasant-smelling.”
 
By the time the sun rode high enough to signal mid-morning, Jack was dozing noisily in a crooked-legged sprawl across the bed and Elizabeth was coaxing his boots from his feet.
 
It was quite perfect, really, considering the wealth of arrangements she had to make. She’d crept across the room, cringing with every groan of the boards beneath her girth, and had dressed, the parlor clock striking 11:00. She made her way down the stairs with minimal difficulty, but by the time she’d tidied the mess of feathers and flour in the kitchen - and checked on the stew Jack had set to bubbling - she barely had enough energy to slog out the door, through the tall grass, and down the cliff-face.
 
Hauling her boat from its repose high up the bank proved almost impossible, and Elizabeth cursed the low tide as she struggled into the water. Sweat collected in irksome beads above her lip. She spat as she dropped to her seat, her oars clattering against the boat-bottom.
 
Huffing breathlessly for several minutes, she finally found the strength to collect the paddles and begin rowing. The noon air clung to her with plump, wet fingers, and only occasionally did the wind sigh, cutting the dampness. The ocean winked its glassy eye as she rowed, the water grayed and weary beneath a dove-bellied sky.
 
Her oars stirred the water in silver pockets, the smattering of froth and bubble like tumbling coins in the tempered light of a shrouded noon.
 
 
~
 
 
It’s not that Elizabeth disliked rowing.
 
On the contrary, the burn in her arms and the rocking rhythm of her body proved tolerable most days – the pleasant scoop-plunk, scoop-splosh of the oars entering the water enhancing the experience by bounds. She could even live with the cramping in her hands when the water rushed and the air savored of the clean, leafy crispness of land-bred winds.
 
The fact of the matter was, Elizabeth almost enjoyed rowing, most days.
 
But, on this particular, stagnant-aired, dead-water, grim-skied day, Elizabeth despised rowing – not to mention the laudable expanse of her middle – more than she could articulate.
 
It was an issue of mechanics, really. The oars bobbed against her stomach with every swoop, upsetting the babe within. She could hardly situate the poles thanks to her burgeoning girth, and it was practically impossible to seat herself in the bloody boat, let alone find room to stretch her numbing legs without toppling into the water.
 
Thus - for these reasons and a host of others - Elizabeth plodded into Sara’s shop soaking wet, her jaw clenched and the smile plastered across her face no match for the scowl in her eyes.
 
Saraswati’s head jerked up when she entered. As always, Jack’s sister appraised Elizabeth – and her belly – with an air lingering between the quiet, content consideration of a woman with a secret and the vaguely disapproving, arguably tolerant, judiciously hopeful stare of a sister with an agenda. But, as soon as that familiar glance had flitted across Sara’s face, it was gone, replaced by a cheek-splitting smile and a clap of her flour-coated hands.
 
“Ah! Sister – come, come! You must sit, kya? You’re looking very pale and watery.” Wiping her hands on her sari, Sara embraced Elizabeth, grasping her by the shoulders and kissing each cheek with a wet smack.
 
“Hold, hold,” she raised a finger, silencing Elizabeth’s salutations. “Sit, please. I am having something perfect for your condition. Waiting for me, please?”
 
“Well – alright…. And hello, Sara. Happy Christmas.” Elizabeth cracked a smile despite herself, thinking of Jack’s restless fidgeting and the similarities between brother and sister.
 
“Ah, yes, yes. Hello! Happy, happy holy day!” Sara called, disappearing behind the silk curtain that separated the apothecary from the shop, the tail of her sari sweeping past Elizabeth with a swish of wind.
 
Elizabeth sat, grateful for the rocking chair that had curiously found its way out of Sara’s living chambers and into the shop once news of Elizabeth’s pregnancy had spread. She rocked for several minutes, her mouth slackening as she began to cool, the sweat evaporating from her skin in sighs.
 
“And where is my brother?” Sara shouted from the back, the sound of something being stirred trailing her voice. “He hasn’t taken to drinking so early, is it?”
 
“No,” Elizabeth called back, her fingers twitching as her knuckles began to unclamp. “He’s home…. Sleeping.”
 
Sara poked her head through the curtain, a groomed eyebrow arching skyward. “Do not tell me you came all this long-long way with no help?”
 
“Actually yes, I did.”
 
Sara sucked her teeth in admonishment, shaking her head and disappearing behind the curtain again.
 
“This is not right for a woman in such conditions!” she sing-songed, the words forming a familiar melody of chastisement. “I’m going to tell that brother of mine what’s for when I’m seeing him again.”
 
Elizabeth grinned, imagining Jack’s younger, slimmer, altogether slighter sister giving him a healthy dose of “what’s for.” She’d witnessed such occurrences in the past, the usually calm, easygoing Sara backing the infamous Captain Sparrow into a corner when the occasion called for it. Hilarious, and altogether unsuspected when she considered the Jack she’d met on the docks of Port Royal.
 
“To be truthful, Sara, I came here in secret. I wanted to surprise Jack for Christmas.”
 
“What sort of surprising do you have in mind?”
 
“I’d like you and Rajeev and Captain Teague to join us for dinner, if you haven’t already made plans, that is.”
 
Sara slipped through the curtain, a cup of something frothy in her hand. Like her brother, Sara’s walk possessed a certain unnervingly feline quality, an almost-prowl that, in the feminine, was not subdued by drink or artifice. She slinked across the room, plucking a sprig of something from a topiary and garnishing the drink before stooping in front of Elizabeth, the glass of God-knows-what extended by a slim, almond hand. Elizabeth accepted it with a raised eyebrow and a weary smile, eyeing the foam that dribbled down her wrist with something akin to consternation.
 
“We will, of course, come to visit.” Sara placed her palms on Elizabeth’s belly, cooing to the baby within. “And you, my little nephew – my darling baby-ji. Have you been nice to your mummy-daddy? No?”
 
She cocked her head, a bird catching a tune and, smiling at the fabric of Lizzie’s dress, continued, “Keeping your mama and baba on toes, hmmm? Well, it is not so much longer now, is it my chickling?” Sara continued speaking for some minutes in a language that Elizabeth recognized as East Indian.
 
Though Elizabeth couldn’t be certain as to the baby’s patronage herself, she’d never so much as alluded to Sara of the possibility of Jack’s role in the child’s conception. Nonetheless, Elizabeth had learned months ago that there was no point in arguing with Jack’s sister. From the moment she’d discovered the pregnancy – around the time Elizabeth herself had teased it all apart – Sara had been determined to play the part of sister and aunt, doting on Elizabeth like a mother hen. Regardless of her attempts to refute Sara’s claims to aunthood, the woman seemed hell-bent on treating the child as family, crooning to Lizzie’s belly in foreign tongues at every chance.
 
“What do you think?” Sara’s voice stirred Elizabeth back to the present. “Hamsa is a good name for a baby, yes? Very, very nice. “Hamsa’ meaning ‘swan’ – and you’re Swann too, see?”
 
“I don’t even think I could pronounce-“
 
“Pssh,” Sara waived away the notion with a Sparrow-esque flourish. “I think, for a boy, Samudra is best.”
 
“Sam-what-ra? Sara, we’ve been over this, and I thought you understood that I wanted to carry on a family name.”
 
Sara pressed a kiss to Lizzie’s belly before standing, arms folded and foot tapping. “Samundra is a family name, belonging to our dignified uncle in Bombay. Good man. Nice house. And a good name, meaning ‘sea’. You can use these other names as the daknam.”
 
“As the what?”
 
Daknam. We have two names. One good name – something strong like Samundra, and one daknam. You hear this when I call Ranjit by the name of Raj, yes? Daknam, meaning –ah, what is the saying,” she snapped her fingers, “- yes-yes: pet name. You know this?”
 
“Sara, in England we don’t –“
 
Jack’s sister clucked her tongue. “This is not England,” she gestured to the room. “In any case, I have heard your daknam.”
 
“But I don’t have one.”
 
“Yes you do. I’ve heard from my brother. What is it? – Ah, yes. Liz-eee,” she extended the last syllable for several beats.
 
“Lizzie? Lizzie’s not a – what is it, again?”
 
“Daknam.”
 
Duck-numb,” pronounced Elizabeth with some effort. “In any case, Jack just calls me ‘Lizzie’ as a sort of nickname, and I’m not even sure that I like –“
 
“Same-same.” Sara waived her away, returning to her perch behind the counter. She ground spices as she spoke, “And why aren’t you drinking, hmmm?”
 
“Oh, this.” Elizabeth eyed the beverage suspiciously, the milky foam having fizzled to a grayish sort of grit. “What is it?”
 
“Ashwaganda – and some mints for cooling. Good for stamina increase, better strength, and even gives boost to vigor in the bedroom.”
 
“Sara, listen, I appreciate your thoughtfulness, but I assure you that the last thing I need is a more vigorous…bedroom. My bedroom is – well, there’s just nothing of that sort to be had.”
 
Saraswati stopped her grinding, pestle poised mid-air, and cocked an eyebrow. She grinned, serpentine, from ear-to-ear. “My brother? Now you’re pulling legs.”
 
“Your brother and I have nothing but friendship between us. We’ve been comrades in battle, and we’ve-“
 
“You tell me, Liz-eee – why does a man take to living with a woman that has fed him to the fishes, hmmm?”
 
Cheeks a-fire, Elizabeth studied the swirl of milk and sediment in her cup. “Jack and I,” she shook herself, her whisper strengthening to a dim rasp, “whatever may have been possible once – we’re just…. It’s not the sort of relationship you think, Sara. He helps me out of a lack of anything better to do. That’s all.”
 
“The heart knows what the hands do not.”
 
They sat in silence for long moments, the shadows lengthening as the day rushed onward. Elizabeth sipped her drink, the taste surprisingly pleasant if not a touch loamy, and Sara worked quietly, her fingertips red with what look like chili-powder as she poured a mixture of spices from her mortar into a rice-paper envelope.
 
 
~
 
 
By the time Elizabeth, Teague, Sara and Rajeev had set sail for the brief journey from the Cove to Elizabeth’s island, the sun was already dipping low on the horizon. The cloud-cover of midday had fractured, cracked like an egg to reveal a saffron yoke of sunlight. Turquoise and coral, the clouds now marbled the sky, anything but sullen as they looped in elegant curls across the ripe-peach haze of approaching dusk.
 
They’d elected to employ the use of a small fishing skiff belonging to one of the market-keepers housed near Sara’s shop for the journey; the prospect of rowing having proven unappealing to all parties concerned. Elizabeth’s little boat swung from its side, bobbing in and out of the waves. Much to the Pirate King’s consternation – and in equal parts to the thrill of Jack’s nephew – Captain Teague insisted on sailing the little shark. All manner of festive treats had been loaded into the boat thanks to Sara’s preparations and Elizabeth’s careful supervision, none the least of which was a small lime tree that Sara had insisted upon bringing.
 
They made quick work of the narrow channel, all-in-all, and Elizabeth found herself scaling the cliff-face just as the first bands of fire began to billow at the horizon. The first to struggle up the jagged steps, she did not wait for the rest of her party to unload their goods and begin climbing.
 
It was, after all, dusk on Christmas day.
 
And besides, Sara would hear nothing of her offers to ferry the tree up the stairs, nor to help with anything else of substance. She wondered whether she’d have time to sweep the house before the party made their way inside.
 
As she plodded towards the kitchen door, she felt a small pang of guilt for having left Jack without so much as a word regarding her whereabouts, but then he must have come to understand her habit of roaming after their months of cohabitation.
 
Surely.
 
She burst inside, greeted by the heady aroma of stewed-duck and a murderous scowl as Jack looked up from the cook-pot,.
 
“Where the devil have you been?” Jack seethed, stirring the stew vigorously. Without his braided beard and his usual frosting of gold and gilt, his face took on a more serious, less impish cast.
 
Elizabeth bit her cheek against the urge to giggle. “I had to fetch something from the city.”
 
“You had to fetch some thing from the city. She had to fetch something from the city, she says,” his voice rose in pitch, reminding her of a mere spit of land sparkling somewhere in the Caribbean. The scent of burning fronds and charred glass seemed to appear mysteriously, a grace note beneath boiled carrots and celery root. “Ah, well that makes perfect sense, then! Of course. You had to fetch something from the city…. Bloody splendid, Lizzie! What did you suppose would have happened if I hadn’t awoken in time to cull this blazing inferno, hmmm? Much as you may enjoy the thought of burning me to a crisp, I’d much prefer not to expire in a blaze of duck-” he flailed, searching for a word, “of duck – oh, sod it – of a bloody, damnable poultry fire!”
 
Jack, in his flapping-about, had spilled stew down the front of his shirt. His eyes flitted like moths in the firelight, and Elizabeth could not contain the wave of laughter fighting for release when he began to curse and wipe at his tunic.
 
She held her belly, chuckling despite the mad, murder-glazed cast of his eyes.
 
“And a happy Christmas to you too, Jack,” she managed once the fit had passed.
 
“Oh, and I’m so thrilled – positively titillated – that I could fulfill my role as court jester, Your Highness,” he sneered, still fussing with his shirt. Elizabeth plucked a rag from the table and eased her way towards him.
 
“Oh, Jack,” she smiled, “it’s Christmas.” She brushed his hands away from his collar.
 
“Let go,” she murmured, dabbing at the swatch.
 
And then it happened, the tiny slip of her hand that brought her fingers to rest against the exposed skin at the crown of his sternum. He was slick – moist from the steaming stew and the heat of the hearth. She felt that same heat roll over her skin in waves, the linen of her underdress suddenly rasping against her breasts in near-painful sighs.
 
Jack.” Pressing the pads of her fingers to the pliant skin, she felt the rag slip to the floor, her fingers sliding north.
 
To the hollow at the base of his throat.
 
Over his Adam’s apple, bobbing as he swallowed.
 
Across the blade of his jaw.  
 
He stood limp-boned, allowing the exploration even as his breathing labored. The shadows in the room seemed to grow and connect, collecting between them, a force urging Elizabeth’s lips to part and swell, blooming in a rush of heat that forced her to bite her lower lip and tilt forward. She ran her fingertips over the whisper of hair at his chin, the cropped bristle igniting a tingle that bolted from fingertip to knuckle to elbow.
 
Somewhere, distantly, she registered that the pot was boiling over, into the fire – sizzling and sputtering – but then she chanced a look at his eyes and all care for their dinner was lost to her.
 
He watched her, sloe-eyed and dangerous – char and ember beneath his eyelids.
 
Lizzie.” His voice was gravel.
 
A warning.
 
A prayer.
 
A plea, perhaps, but she couldn’t think on it because his mouth was suddenly a whisper from hers. She felt her eyes flutter shut, her lips already remembering the texture of his mouth. He touched her, her heart a skipped stone as he trailed his fingers down her throat, pausing to rest the cool of his rings against her pulse before skittering lower…lower…to the swell of her breasts, to the hem of her neckline.
 
And her heart roared in her ears, waves of droning, raging heartbeat deafening her. She wondered, distantly, whether he could feel her breaking against him.
 
She tilted, ready. Closer – just a breath, and then…
 
Jack jerked away, the door swinging open with a rusted groan, a nearby pot crashing to the floor.
 
Teague, Sara, and Rajeev stood in the doorway, eyes wide.
 

 

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erinya From: [info]erinya Date: January 3rd, 2008 12:44 am (UTC) (Link)
Hee! I love the light-heartedness of this as well as the more serious, sexy elements. Jack dressing up as Will--little does he know that she was just thinking she wouldn't change a thing about him. Sara talking to the baby--she is very amusing as an auntie. Jack being as mad as a wet hen at Elizabeth not being there (he must have been worried.) And the almost-kiss! Well, it's not as if anyone in the doorway will be entirely surprised.

Looking forward to the final part!
writing_samsara From: [info]writing_samsara Date: January 3rd, 2008 02:36 pm (UTC) (Link)
So glad you enjoyed it, love! Thanks so much for reading and commen ting. *g*

I'm so happy that everything came across well, especially Sara as you know how tricky OC's can be (especially OCs that you've already written in a totally different light).

Final part is in the works. Had a bit of a setback yesterday, but am trying to plunk it out before the end of the week.

Thanks so much, again! *hugs*
cmgacrux From: [info]cmgacrux Date: January 3rd, 2008 02:13 am (UTC) (Link)
Lovely chapter, darling. I really enjoyed it. :)
writing_samsara From: [info]writing_samsara Date: January 3rd, 2008 02:38 pm (UTC) (Link)
Thanks so much! :)

Hope you have a glorious 2008.
hlmiwait From: [info]hlmiwait Date: January 3rd, 2008 02:22 am (UTC) (Link)
Loved it. Wonderful from start to finish. Oh how I chuckled at Jack - just delightful and the almost kiss - do I even need to comment? I'm sure no one would be surprised and probably thinking 'It's about time!' LOL
writing_samsara From: [info]writing_samsara Date: January 3rd, 2008 02:40 pm (UTC) (Link)
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and leave such lovely comments! I really appreciate it, and I'm thrilled to know that you enjoyed my story.

And yes, I'm sure no one is surprised about the almost-kiss - except maybe Jack and Lizzie themselves. *g*
geekmama From: [info]geekmama Date: January 3rd, 2008 03:37 am (UTC) (Link)
As always, I love the richness of your descriptions, and Sara is a charming OC. And the almost-kiss was just so delicious. Lovely work!!
writing_samsara From: [info]writing_samsara Date: January 3rd, 2008 02:41 pm (UTC) (Link)
Oh, thanks so much! I'm so happy that you enjoyed this - especially Sara, as it's difficult to write an OC that people enjoy without falling into the pit of self-insertion.

Thanks again, and Happy New Year!
compassrose7577 From: [info]compassrose7577 Date: January 3rd, 2008 03:51 am (UTC) (Link)
Was dying to go to bed, but had to ready first. The sacrifices!

And the sacrifices that Jack is willing to make...and his description of said travails were too special! Falling alseep from the exhaustion of having to make himself presentable and bring her breakfast....typical man! It's just too much work, isn't it?

You always bring Jack and Lizzie to life in such personal ways. Both of them have a certain sense of irony about themselves and the world they are in. But, there's nothing better than cranky Jack! Or his 'Jackness'. Loved it!

The sad part is, this makes me realize how much I've missed you being about. Hope this is the beginning of a wonderful habit!
writing_samsara From: [info]writing_samsara Date: January 3rd, 2008 02:44 pm (UTC) (Link)
Oh, thanks so much for staying up to read and comment! I'm so happy that you enjoyed it.

I'm hoping the new habit will stick as well, although the ever-mounting pile of unchecked emails, work junk, bills, and things-that-must-be-cleaned grows. Dang real life.

Here's hoping, though....
faeritales From: [info]faeritales Date: January 3rd, 2008 04:46 am (UTC) (Link)
Well, this was quite lovely! I love all these different takes on Jack's background. Yours works quite well! I love your Elizabeth, trying to be English, and Sara, reminding her that she left that life behind.

Lovely story, and I look forward to part 3!
writing_samsara From: [info]writing_samsara Date: January 3rd, 2008 02:46 pm (UTC) (Link)
Oh, thank you so much! I'm thrilled that you like my take on Jack's background - it sort of stuck after spying Jack "meditating" in DMC, and it's been fun to write because it allows me to bring POTC a bit closer to home.

Thank you so much, again! :)
salr323 From: [info]salr323 Date: January 3rd, 2008 10:12 am (UTC) (Link)
Woohoo! :) So glad to see this, I've been looking forward to it. And very lovely it is. Jack's deconstruction is very poigniant; the idea that he thinks himself only acceptable to Elizabeth when he's disguised as someone else is quite heart breaking.

She tilted, ready. Closer – just a breath, and then…

Oh, you tease! :) Lovely, lovely moment, that almost-kiss. What was Lizzie thinking, to be asking all those visitors? Can't wait for the last chapter! Fab work.
writing_samsara From: [info]writing_samsara Date: January 3rd, 2008 02:50 pm (UTC) (Link)
Oh, thank you so, so much! I'm so glad that you're enjoying this, and that you caught the bits of heartbreak beneath the cheer and silliness.

And yeah, I'm a horrible tease. *winks* Can't help myself.

Still trying to plunk out C.3 - and I'm hoping to post it this weekend, if all goes well.

Thank you so much for reading, again - and Happy New Year!

(And now I'm off to catch up on your fic! *squeals* My stupid internet has been down, and I've missed updates, dammit!)
tiamary From: [info]tiamary Date: January 4th, 2008 03:59 am (UTC) (Link)

Writing Question

Can't help asking a writerly question here, as someone getting back into writing after a long break (writerly is not a word but hey if Jack can make up words...). What is the purpose, in your opinion, of the tease at the end of a chapter or episode of a serialized television show, particularly when it's something the reader or viewer has been waiting on for awhile? Is it primarily to get the reader or viewer to keep reading or viewing, or to illustrate something about the characters, such as they're not ready yet? (i.e., would Jack have stopped when people appeared at the door if he had really been ready to take the step?).
writing_samsara From: [info]writing_samsara Date: January 4th, 2008 05:27 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Writing Question

Oh, *squee* for a writerly question (great word, writerly - poetic license being what it is and all)! I love to talk writing even more than I enjoy talking about pirates, and that's saying something.

To answer your question, I think it can be both. This is one of the few places where authorial intent really is of some small import, as the author's intention towards the work can play into the styling of the tease - and thus the reader's response - as much as pure audience analysis. For some writers, ending with a tease is more plot-based, a function designed to keep interest piqued while maneuvering the plot in order to extend a theme or highlight a detail of character or setting. In other cases, I think the tease can function much like a line break in poetry; i.e. it becomes a question of style and "weight", a sort of refocusing to highlight a moment. In prose, this tends to veer towards highlighting a truth - lending a bit of depth - whereas in poetry the breaks can be as much about the sound as about the emphasis of meaning. Also, the idea of flow (poetry) or pacing (prose) comes into play as well.

However, the truth of it is - to paraphrase the late-great Fugitive Agrarians - that you as a reader are really the deciding factor in terms of the purpose of the tease. Your reading of that moment informs the work far more than any intent the author could ever espouse.

For example: when I wrote the teaser here, I had several intentions:
A) Plot-wise I knew I could not allow the kiss to come to fruition, and I knew I had to introduce Jack's family to the scene in an interesting way.
B) I wanted to create a sort of stage for comic tension in the third chapter, as I knew that the truth of Jack and Lizzie's situation would play well against the assumptions of their company.
C) In terms of the bigger picture of the story I'm telling, I simply could not have them kiss. However, I wanted to make sure to convey the tension between them while giving my readers a treat.
D) I wanted the physical break, that jarring sense of intrusion, to speak to the emotional state of the characters - most especially the fact that Jack probably isn't ready to kiss Lizzie as a part of him, his 'true' self as represented by his family, is in opposition to emotional acceptance/realization of his desires/feelings. This is especially important in terms of the larger picture of KotS, as the backstory that frames this vignette is yet to be written but nonetheless lies in wait in my brain.
E) And, of course, I just plain wanted people to be compelled to keep reading.

Be [all of that] as it may, the most important facet of this whole deal is how you interpret my meaning, you know? You are the determiner of my intent.

Did that make any sense at all? It's late and I'm feeling ramble-y. I hope it made a little sense, and in any case, welcome back to the world of writing! It's so exciting to have you among us. :)
akarii From: [info]akarii Date: January 3rd, 2008 02:34 pm (UTC) (Link)
This:

A lime and a mango had been sliced and fanned in smiling arches on a chipped china plate,

and this:

I’d much prefer not to expire in a blaze of duck-” he flailed, searching for a word, “of duck – oh, sod it – of a bloody, damnable poultry fire!”

and this:

she couldn’t think on it because his mouth was suddenly a whisper from hers. She felt her eyes flutter shut, her lips already remembering the texture of his mouth.

a very, very happy akarii make. Splendid, hun!

Muah =3 !
writing_samsara From: [info]writing_samsara Date: January 3rd, 2008 02:52 pm (UTC) (Link)
Oh, thank you so much! I'm so happy that you enjoyed everything. *g*

And thanks for picking out some of my "darlings" - always a boost to see that the writing is as enjoyable as the plot. *hugs*
kseenaa From: [info]kseenaa Date: January 3rd, 2008 06:12 pm (UTC) (Link)
Ah... Nice. Really nice. I like Teague. I am glad you put him in this story to. :-) He is a cool man. And the sister? Good lord! I love her! *cheers*
writing_samsara From: [info]writing_samsara Date: January 3rd, 2008 06:34 pm (UTC) (Link)
Oh, thanks so much, love! I'm so glad that you're still enjoying the story.

And yay for Teague! :) I haven't really written about him until now, but he's really got a place in Kingdoms of the Swan, so hopefully I can pull it off. :)

Also, I'm so, so happy that you like Sara. She's my pet OC, and I just can't seem to keep myself from writing her into my stories.

Thanks so much, and Happy New Year!
hereswith From: [info]hereswith Date: January 3rd, 2008 11:53 pm (UTC) (Link)
It's always a pleasure to immerse oneself in the world you create, the scents, the tastes, the colours, the details, all so vivid, and this is certainly no exception :-) This is lovely and funny, too. I really liked the scene between Elizabeth and Sara, and the whole last bit, Jack with the stew, angry at her for disappearing, Elizabeth's amusement and then the moment of tension, is most wonderful.

I have to mention the descriptions of that brief journey, as well, because both struck me as especially evocative. The ocean winked its glassy eye as she rowed, the water grayed and weary beneath a dove-bellied sky. Her oars stirred the water in silver pockets, the smattering of froth and bubble like tumbling coins in the tempered light of a shrouded noon. And later: The cloud-cover of midday had fractured, cracked like an egg to reveal a saffron yoke of sunlight. Turquoise and coral, the clouds now marbled the sky, anything but sullen as they looped in elegant curls across the ripe-peach haze of approaching dusk.
writing_samsara From: [info]writing_samsara Date: January 4th, 2008 03:16 am (UTC) (Link)
Thank you so, so much for reading and commenting! Your input is always so uplifting - a real day-maker. :)

I'm so glad that everything came together for you while still managing to be fun. Sometimes it's more difficult to write the lighthearted moments than the heartache and turmoil.

And thank you, so much, for commenting on my darlings (cited diction). Ot's really a thrill to know that beneath all of the character-making and plotty-goodness, the language still shines.

*hugs*
hereswith From: [info]hereswith Date: January 4th, 2008 04:00 pm (UTC) (Link)
*hugs back* And a belated Happy New Year!
djarum99 From: [info]djarum99 Date: January 5th, 2008 08:10 am (UTC) (Link)
Sorry, sorry, sorry to be so late in commenting - I offer icons as tribute (see related post). This is fabulous, as I've told you before, lyric and evocative and all things great writing should be. I love the descriptions of pregnant!Lizzie's struggles with her burgeoning body - very, very realistic *g*

Her fingers curled into the wrinkles his hips had created, the sensation of the cool, cotton ridges rolling between her fingers and sending a tingle zipping up her forearm and into her shoulder-socket. She grasped at the sheets, yawning and imagining him beside her.

This is wonderful, the perfect portrait of a woman longing for a man she thinks she can't have. Sigh.

“You look ravishing, Jack Sparrow.”

“I do, don’t I.” And he turned to her then, all gold and twinkle as his palm found its place at the crook of her hip, guiding her across the room to rest in her rocking chair.


I have such a clear picture of Jack at that moment, cleaned up and gorgeous and infinitely pleased with himself, and the walking-on-eggshells feeling underneath. They're being so careful with each other here.

Saraswati’s head jerked up when she entered. As always, Jack’s sister appraised Elizabeth – and her belly – with an air lingering between the quiet, content consideration of a woman with a secret and the vaguely disapproving, arguably tolerant, judiciously hopeful stare of a sister with an agenda. But, as soon as that familiar glance had flitted across Sara’s face, it was gone, replaced by a cheek-splitting smile and a clap of her flour-coated hands.

Love, love, love your descriptions of Saraswati - she's so vivid and animated and distinct. I can hear every word.

“You had to fetch some thing from the city. She had to fetch something from the city, she says,” his voice rose in pitch, reminding her of a mere spit of land sparkling somewhere in the Caribbean. The scent of burning fronds and charred glass seemed to appear mysteriously, a grace note beneath boiled carrots and celery root.

Lovely callback, and I can hear him snarking clear as day :-)

He stood limp-boned, allowing the exploration even as his breathing labored. The shadows in the room seemed to grow and connect, collecting between them, a force urging Elizabeth’s lips to part and swell, blooming in a rush of heat that forced her to bite her lower lip and tilt forward. She ran her fingertips over the whisper of hair at his chin, the cropped bristle igniting a tingle that bolted from fingertip to knuckle to elbow.

So, so hot - something about "he allowed the exploration" reduces me to a gibbering puddle. Devastating, and *guh*

I love your J/E and this universe, and I'm so thrilled that you're writing again as I know how much it means to you, and the fic is so damn perfect. Can't wait for the next chapter, and please feel free to send for beta - I'm impatient :-)





writing_samsara From: [info]writing_samsara Date: January 5th, 2008 08:44 am (UTC) (Link)
"Sorry, sorry, sorry to be so late in commenting - I offer icons as tribute (see related post)."
--- First of all: no sweat regarding the commenting. Really. I dance with joy when I see your comments because they are always everything delicious and informing and addictive, but don't feel bad about the delay at all - or obligated,ever. No worries. That being said: yay! Detailed comments are better than cigarettes and sex..... ;)
Second of all: thank you SO much again for the icons. They are friggin fabulous, and I am in heaven. *g*

"This is wonderful, the perfect portrait of a woman longing for a man she thinks she can't have. Sigh."
----You've picked out one of my darlings here. *g* I felt it so much while writing - the cool sheets of morning, the ripples and wrinkles left in the wake of another body - and beneath it all the pervading sense of that which cannot be had. I'm so glad it came across.

"I have such a clear picture of Jack at that moment, cleaned up and gorgeous and infinitely pleased with himself, and the walking-on-eggshells feeling underneath. They're being so careful with each other here."
----Oh, I'm so happy that this moment popped. Another darling, and another moment I could feel in my marrow.

"Love, love, love your descriptions of Saraswati - she's so vivid and animated and distinct. I can hear every word."
---- *dances* Seriously, I'm so very glad that she's vivid and present as a character. OCs are so bloody tricky, and she's really become this person that I can see and hear as though she's standing beside me as I type. It's funny that even though she's so different in this universe from the version I wrote in "Sailing in Samsara", she's still the same person in my head - very vibrant and a product of environment and circumstance and all that. Anyways. Rambling, but you know how I can go on and on adnauseum about this stuff. (The bottle of wine I drank tonight doesn't hurt, either....)

"So, so hot - something about "he allowed the exploration" reduces me to a gibbering puddle."
-----I aim to please, ma'am. ;) Lots of fun to write, that bit. Imagination is such a great feature of evolution.....

" love your J/E and this universe, and I'm so thrilled that you're writing again as I know how much it means to you, and the fic is so damn perfect. "
---I'm so glad! You know how the inadequecy demons can be from time to time, and God knows that this universe, though this stuff exists mostly in my head right now, is almost a real place for me - an escape from the much paler world in which I live. Thank you! It means so much, especially from someone with so much talent - and so much writing experience.

And I'll be sure to send both C.3's for beta ASAP. C.3 opf KotS is pretty much written in my mind. All that remains is the excavation of language. As for the third part of this bad boy, I've got a bit done, and will work on it tomorrow. *crosses fingers*
obfusc8er From: [info]obfusc8er Date: January 6th, 2008 12:47 pm (UTC) (Link)
A poultry fire! *snort choke cough*

Well, that left off at an awkward moment. Oops. Looking forward to more.
writing_samsara From: [info]writing_samsara Date: January 7th, 2008 01:31 am (UTC) (Link)
Hee hee. Thanks for reading and commenting! More is on the way, albeit a little later than I'd hoped as my stupid computer is having issues again. *kicks computer*
fried_flamingo From: [info]fried_flamingo Date: January 7th, 2008 11:59 am (UTC) (Link)
Ok I read this a few days ago but am just very belated in leaving feedback (so of course I had to read it again, just to refresh my memory. Oh the chore! ;))

What a wonderful addition to the first installment of this story. Jack being so awkwardly romantic and attentive to Lizzie and, like so many of us, I have such a kink for Deconstructed!Jack. And having a clear image of Sara now just adds to the enjoyment.

The chill of iron beneath her fingertips loomed closer each day, it seemed

Lovely juxtaposition of that memory alongside the feel of the real and present sheets beneath her hand.

She poked her head out of her chrysalis, an eyebrow rising. “Did you just call me ‘Dumpling’, Jack?”

And that just made me chortle!

A waggle of his brows and a crooked leer, his hips rocking forward ever so slightly

Ooh I'd give that the once over, quick as you like ;)

She marveled at his quickness, at the deftness of his fingers as he worked. Using only the tip of his index finger, middle finger, and thumb, he managed to make quick work of her plate.

Why does that image get me all swoony? *sigh*

Saraswati stopped her grinding, pestle poised mid-air, and cocked an eyebrow. She grinned, serpentine, from ear-to-ear. “My brother? Now you’re pulling legs.”

I love that Sara knows Jack so well, knows his character.

And as for the last scene, girl, what are you trying to do to me??? Again I tend to obsess over Jack's neck sweat (because JD has such a beautiful neck and it looks so pretty when it's all shiny-like) and this just tapped right into it. So sultry and sensual and so teasing. How can you leave us hanging like that??

Can't wait for Ch.3!






writing_samsara From: [info]writing_samsara Date: January 7th, 2008 05:26 pm (UTC) (Link)
"Oh the chore!"
---- *G* Sorry to torture you, hun. ;) And thanks for leaving such detailed feedback. It's a real treat to know the bits people really responded to.

Glad you enjoyed Jack in this one. It's fun to strip him down a bit (yes, yes it is *g*), and this whole fic conecpt was born from the idea of Jack trying to look like Will.

And so glad you're digging Sara even more now that you've a visual. I find it helps alot myself.

"Lovely juxtaposition of that memory alongside the feel of the real and present sheets beneath her hand."
----So happy that came through well. :)

"Ooh I'd give that the once over, quick as you like ;)"
----Hell yes! Right here. Right now.

"Why does that image get me all swoony? *sigh*"
----Yay! So happy it came across well. It's funny, but I had to add this little detail. I've been watching my dad's family eat this way all my life, and I've never been able to quite master the skill. It's an art of sorts, eating rice and curry with your hands without dirtying anything but three teensy fingertips. It would be very strange for her to see, I think, but also somewhat thrilling. God knows he has brilliant, nibble, perfect hands. And damn-blast: just re-read the section and realised I was supposed to explain the tradition behind this breakfast and didn't. Bloody lazy fingers. Must adjust C.3 somehow....

"I love that Sara knows Jack so well, knows his character."
----Thank you! It's really fun to write them this way after writing them at such odds in "Sailign in Samsara." She's a good foil for him - and Lizzie - I think.

"How can you leave us hanging like that??"
----Evil. It think it's all the evil.... ;)

Thanks so much again, love! I'm so glad that you enjoyed this chapter, and I'm hurrying along with C.3, although there was a bit of a bump in the road when my dear, sweet husband accidentally deleted it while installing our new router. Hadn't backed that one up yet....

Yeah, I could kill him. Rewrites from scratch are such a bitch.
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